See the foggy air
Small shadows in the distance
I hear but not see
- zs
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I wrote this haiku about fall weather and when is very foggy out in the morning. In Vancouver it gets foggy a lot and so this is a very common fall scene. Sometime when it gets really foggy you can only see like an arms distance in front of you so your visibility is very limited. This is what was meant by the line I hear but not see. This poem relates to my theme of seasons because it about a typical fall day in Vancouver.
Poetic Device
imagery - see the foggy air
alliteration - small shadows
Hey Zoe. That was a really deep poem, because even though fog and shadows can only be experienced through sight, it was cool how you said you could "hear" it but you don't "see" it. Nice imagery :)
ReplyDeleteThere is great imagery. Simple, yet terribly deep. It appeals to two of the five senses: hearing and sight. I really like its simplicity, it's a contrast I'm grateful for, considering my posts are so long. I could use advice from you on how to shorten them, haha. You leave alot to be imagined, like the shadows. Who could they be? Obviously, someone who is not very stealthy, as you could hear, but are unable to see due to the fog. If coming to school was like this, it'd be much scarier. Good one.
ReplyDeleteAs short as this poem is, it says so much in such little words. The imagery is very strong. It's like you cut down on all the unnecessary details and just made a strong picture. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteyah even though this is a short poem, it has great imagery. it's kinda creepy how you can hear the shadows but not see them. this poem lets the reader have freedom with interpreting it. pretty chill. pce out
ReplyDeleteGood ending. the last line wraps everything up so tightly. Good imagery and im always a fan of nature poems! GOOD WORK!
ReplyDeleteThis is greatly condensed which makes it an easy read but gets the point across. I can see how this would be winter! "I hear but not see" is a very powerful line that is a good closer and maybe refers to the darker days in the winter?
ReplyDeletegood job zoe. this was a great poem. the idea was excellent because we could all picture the foggy air and that scene. short and sweet. Nice work
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